Mr+Noble+Letter

second draft.

Dear Mr Noble,

Hi my name is Ibrahim Ibrahim. I am a year 7 in room 23, my teacher is Miss Crawford. My main hobbies are playing sport and watching sport on the television, I play soccer and I used to play rugby but my favourite sport would be soccer. Some other hobbies of mine are playing Nintendo wii, playing basketball with my brothers and sister and kicking a ball around with them too.

My favourite subject in school besides from P.E would probably Maths because I like it better than other subjects even though I’m better at Reading than Maths. I do not like Spelling that much and I do not think I am that good at it either so I want to improve in it later on in the year. I am trying to become better in Reading as well as my spelling and Writing, to help get me a good job later in life.

For school improvements, I think we should have more mufti days because people like them and they fundraise some money for the school too,. With more mufti days there will be more discos and that will mean a lot more money. Some LAN cables do not work inside the laptop classes so they might need someone to fix them. The bark on the playground hurts when you walk or jump on it when you are barefoot, so I suggest you should plant grass there so it would not hurt as much.

I have had a lot of good experiences thought my year in Fairfield intermediate, like in Pauanui. I had never been to Pauanui before and I had a good time there. Fairfield Intermediate is different to my old school, but in a good way! My old school had no lunchtime activities! In food tech I have learnt a lot of things about cooking.

Thank you for this great school that has lots of opportunities like tech and all of the classes I hope it would not change next year.

Yours sincerely, Ibrahim.I

//__Miss Crawford - Good effort, Ibrahim. Straight to the point. I'm glad you liked Pauanui camp - just wait until Port Waikato next year :) You have a few errors to fix which I have underlined.__


 * __Good copy__**

Room 23 Fairfield Intermediate Hamilton
 * Ibrahim. Ibrahim

Friday 26th June 2009

Mr Noble Fairfield Intermediate Chartwell Hamilton**


 * Dear Mr Noble,

Hi my name is Ibrahim Ibrahim Ibrahim. I am a year 7 in room 23, my teacher is Miss Crawford. My main hobbies are playing sport and watching sport on the television, I play soccer and I used to play rugby but my favourite sport would be soccer. Some other hobbies of mine are playing Nintendo wii, playing basketball with my brothers and sister and kicking a ball around with them too.

My favourite subject in school besides from P.E would probably Maths because I like it better than other subjects even though I’m better at Reading than Maths. I do not like Spelling that much and I do not think I am that good at it either so I want to improve in it later on in the year. I am trying to become better in Reading as well as my spelling and Writing, to help get me a good job later in life.

For school improvements, I think we should have more mufti days because people like them and they fundraise some money for the school too,. With more mufti days there will be more discos and that will mean a lot more money. Some LAN cables do not work inside the laptop classes so they might need someone to fix them. The bark on the playground hurts when you walk or jump on it when you are barefoot, so I suggest you should plant grass there so it would not hurt as much.

I have had a lot of good experiences thought my year in Fairfield intermediate, like in Pauanui. I had never been to Pauanui before and I had a good time there. Fairfield Intermediate is different to my old school, but in a good way! My old school had no lunchtime activities! In food tech I have learnt a lot of things about cooking.

Thank you for this great school that has lots of opportunities like tech and all of the classes I hope it would not change next year.

Yours sincerely, Ibrahim.I** //